of sight on the wind .. that, as far as I know, is
the highest form of haiku
Lovewombat: Lani: wow..umm..ok..I never realized that is
was like that. I just enjoy making the images..and the
structure..
LEGS: *all poets write some/saying something is more
Rare/writing doesn't rhyme..*
scarlett: *Bright shining moon/lights the night
garden/fairies dance and play.*
LEGS: 4-5-4.. scarlett.. for the timing.. make it elves..one
syllable
scarlett: Gemini has a way with words..perhaps I will
change it to toads..instead of fairies..
LEGS: scarlett, didn't mean to sound mean.. it is hard to
stop editing sometimes.. meant to be helpful..
scarlett: not taken that way at all, don't worry about it
Lovewombat: *Tumultuous winds/Stroke the face with quick
razor sharp/claws lightly dancing*
Lani: Lovewombat ooops 5/8/5 but that carries too
scarlett: does that leave one lightly bleeding?
Lovewombat: 5-7-7 is a haiku..but I know there is another
form it's like 7-11-7 I think..I can't remember
Lovewombat: 5-7-5 is the haiku...that was a typo..the
5-7-7..
Lani: to 5/7/5 it.. *Tumultuous winds/Stroke the face
with razor sharp/claws lightly dancing*
Lovewombat: It really is cool how haiku's work..
"In Japanese, tanka is often written in one
straight line, but in English and other languages, we
usually divide the lines into the five syllabic units:
5-7-5-7-7."
Lovewombat: That's like a super haiku..grin.. and..
"Many writers of English-language tanka use less
than 31 syllables to achieve the form in English. American
Tanka publishes tanka of five lines that are concise and
evocative, are true to the purpose and spirit of tanka, and
echo the original Japanese rhythm and structure.
"haiku is a short poem that originated in Japan.
It began as the hokku or first link of a renga which was a
series of linked poems. haiku is attentive to time and place
and uses plain language. The resonance in haiku comes from
the juxtaposition of ideas to bring about an "Aha" moment in
the mind of the reader. The format in Japanese is 5-7-5
syllables on three lines and has a seasonal word. The
foreign language writer usually strives for the essence of
haiku without strict adherence to the 17 syllable count."
Lani: *Lovewombat found a / haiku website me thinks and / is
copy pasting*
Lovewombat: Sorry..hehehehe..I thought it was a good
definition
Lani: ok . better form .. *Lovewombat found a / haiku website
this Spring and / is copy pasting*
Lovewombat: *It's amazing what/you can find on the internet/ if
you do a search*
LEGS: *Crows like question marks/ puntuate the telephone / wire
sentences sent*
Lani: Legs, one too many - last 5 is a 6 *S* *Crows like
question marks / punctuate the telephone / wire sentences*
..wire is a two syllable word 'y er'
LEGS: 'waahl,' it is more like one in Texas.. 'wah(r)'..
*g* but yes.. you are right.
Lani: LEGS *g* .. yeah .. where there is a difference,
the syllable stuff is in the saying not the written
(apparently) .. if what I was taught is correct
scarlett: caw caw
LEGS: changing wire to line.. *G* which I started to
write.. *laughing* *Crows like question marks/puntuate the
telephone / line sentences sent.*
Lani: LEGS that works LOL!
Lovewombat:
LEGS: grin..I like it
Lovewombat: *Seagull Sentinal/Stands on a lightpole
watching/sleeping cadillacs*
Lani: Lovewombat you have a gift !! haiku is a difficult
form, particularly in English .. apparently it's somewhat
easier in Japanese (but I wouldn't swear to it) .. my first
net friend was an English professor in North Carolina . he
taught me haiku (well he taught well . I learned sort of)
*S*
Lovewombat: In high school I did "death" haiku..the
creative writing teacher told me to be more
traditional..hehe
scarlett: death haiku - it could convey beauty *s* it is a
part of life after all
Lovewombat: Scarlett: I was writing about like this..off
the cuff: *arrows piercing skin/doctors scalpel cutting
skin/death's beckoning hand*
scarlett: ouch..I see why your teacher may have found that
disturbing, love..fairly morbid
Lovewombat: I write them on paper..hehehe..sometimes off
the cuff..but mostly on paper.. *giggle*
Lovewombat: Scarlett; but realistic..I mean I was a
gamer..hehe..AD&D has warped my mind..fertile imagination
and all..hehe..
I was a precocious youth..with too much
intelligence for the classes I had..I was bored to death in
high school… o' so many moons ago..in times passaged trunk.
Lani: Lovewombat school boredom is deadly for many .. they
drop out .. not because they can't do the work but because
they are bored out of their minds .. and its usually those
who are not content to be taught WHAT to think .. they want
to learn more and more ways of HOW to think . . .critical thinking which is not the same as criticizing
everyone who doesn't agree with one's own thinking LOL!!
*WEG*
Lovewombat: Lani: critical thinking is something they should
teach..but some parents don't want their kids to learn it
cause they think maybe they'll rebel or some such..
scarlett: in high schools it is..stay within the lines
children
scarlett: and the lucky ones learn to rebel while appearing
to stay with-in the lines
LEGS: *smiling.. scarlett*.. that is almost a haiku..
*the lucky ones learn/ to rebel while appearing / to stay
with-in line*
Lovewombat: *And yes, it was *stay within the lines/..but he
was a good teacher/..did let us stray some..*
Lani: scarlett and there is nothing wrong with having to
learn some basic facts!!
Lani: Lovewombat some of the haiku I've seen have been
'shudder' time stuff too (sheesh how 'traditional can one
get LOL haiku is ancient! but of course it ain't
'merican') *g*
scarlett: poetry is not my forte, free verse comes easier
Lovewombat: All these are free verse..off the top of my
head..by the way..just using haiku as a form.
Lani: scarlett haiku is a difficult (for most people) form
but very beautiful *S* .. it takes a certain mind set but
once one gets into the rhythm of it, it can flow .. it's
sort of an 'internal twist' is how I 'felt' it
Lovewombat: * Pale white Moonlight beams/Shine down bathing
her breasts in/a passionate glow*
Lani: Lovewombat these are wonderful *VBS*
scarlett: *in on-line chat rooms/ we seek to form lovely
verse/ laughing all the way*
Lani: scarlett *VBS*
LEGS: very good scarlett.. like that one.. *S*
LEGS: *Gray Shrouded Winter/Swoops In to Chill and Freeze us/
With His Icy Blasts..*
scarlett: let's have something about springtime..winter is
over
Lani: I'm going to just sit back and listen .. this is great
*VBS*
Lovewombat: *Laughter cascades from/the soul like a torrent
of/fire from the furnace*
Lani: Lovewombat wow ..
scarlett: Love, I like that one..you are quick ..hi curious..can you haiku
curioustoo: scarlett hi-used to know what haiku meant
exactly somewhere around 10 yrs old but forgot please
demonstrate
Lani: curioustoo 5/7/5 syllables .. and if the thought
'crosses' over to the next group its a higher form than
'night rainbow shimmers/the wind falls silent in awe/magic
walks the night' (that is a simpler form where the 5 7 and 5
are each complete thoughts)
scarlett:
the basic form is 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 again.
*Spring's warm breath comes/rising from its hidden
home/ flowers bloom once more*
Lovewombat has been delighting us with his(?)wit.
Lani: *can you haiku new/comer if you can you are/very
welcome here*
Lovewombat: *Dreaming dogs lay a/sleep leap for treats from
their mas/ters outstretched hands*
Lani: Lovewombat LOL .. now we're 'splitting words' *giggle*
curioustoo: *never before / I had not intended it / should
end so quickly*
Lani: curioustoo good start .. add another syllable to the
first '4'
Lovewombat: *Secret Flowers Bloom/ as winter pulls back her
cloak/and the sun rises*
scarlett: ohh..secret flowers are as good as magical cookies
*S*
LEGS: Scarlet...that is good.. need one more syllable in the
first phrase.. perhaps "The Springs" ???
scarlett: so mine is not proper form..*Spring exhales warm
breath..( rising from its hidden
home.. flowers bloom once more* )
that makes it 5
Lani: ok wanna up the ante? .. nature or a season included
in the form *S*
Bluebear: *Winter winds blow dust/ from our harvesttime
efforts/ snowy fruit tastes sweet.*
Lani: (((( Bluebear my love )))) *S*
LEGS: Good Bluebear.. *smiling*
Lovewombat: I have a haiku season cycle someplace..I
remember wriiting it..heheh
Lovewombat: *Passionate kisses/of Spring's subtle lips brings
life/budding from the Earth*
Lani: LOL Wombat you already did it !LOL!
LEGS: the last two are very good season ones, Wombat..
Lani: Lovewombat oooooohhhhhh VERY good!
curioustoo: *above the deso/late hills I seek to
become/whatever life generates*
Lani: curioustoo .. ahhhh , "whatever life is?" 5/7/5
curioustoo: Lani *S* guess I should get to bed :-) can't
count anymore
Lani: curioustoo, I count the syllables on my fingers LOL! hey it's not an easy form till you get your
mind wrapped around it and the thoughts/images you've been
conveying are lovely .. please continue *S*
scarlett: *Summer birds return/ wings wheeling across blue
sky / cycles start anew.*
Lovewombat: Scarlett I like that one..
Lovewombat: *Sacred nipples rise/ as cool winds caress
your/beautious soul*
scarlett: Love ..that one stirs great feeling. I am an
on-line novice..what is *bow*
Lovewombat: Scarlett..a bow is a bow..{bows} see? :) it's
an honourific..:)
scarlett: yes..my mind is bending to it readily..
Bluebear: *Nighttime joy hammers/ small seeds into
fertile flesh/ new child's life begins.*
Lani: Bluebear (blush) *S*
scarlett: I see..thank you and (blush) erotic haiku
bluebear? Well..it is the merry month of may..
Lani: scarlett in case you don't know .. Bluebear is my
husband (we fell in love online) .. and yes .. we're a two
puter family *S* scarlett, you should read the poem he had written and
then read to me our first day/night together in 3D ..it's
posted on the Wedding Photos page at my website *S* (it
worked) *S* .. the direct addy is http://www.mbay.net/~lani/pics.html
scarlett: lani..I would like to read it.
Bluebear: scarlett -- I have the poem Lani mentioned up on
my site too . . . go to --
http://www.redshift.com/~bluebear/nitesong.html
Lovewombat: [grins at Bluebear]
Lovewombat: * haikus resting on/the soul burst forth like
winged/birds from swaying trees*
Lani: Love thats wonderful! wow .
Bluebear: *Rain falling from clouds/ interrupted by
green branch/ then resumes journey.*
curioustoo: *tremblous petals soaked/from sky spreading
widely out/taking wrath with it*
Lani: curioustoo ..I think he's ?? she's ?? GOT IT .. by
jove I think she's got it (sounding like rex harrison in my
fair lady) *grin*
curioustoo: Lani: Spoke too soon! 6 in first line ;-(
"she" for the record
Lani: curioustoo thanks .. *S* .. funny how little gender
matters online .. being to being .. *S*
Lani: curioustoo it's a fun form to play with
especially in a group .. I sure hope this happens again ..
it just sort of sprang up spontaneously ((hugs))
and hope to see you playing with it more *S* (an English
professor in N.C. who was my first online friend taught the
form to me . I'm not very good at it but I remember all he
said about the form and can at least help others with it if
needed *S*
Lovewombat: *Trembling fingers reach/to embrace thy silky
thighs/as magic shines through*
curioustoo: never... *from whence they came we / are moving our
thoughts towards / oneness in spirit*
Bluebear: *Dark is Light unborn/ God sends Love to
Brighten All/ With Light, Darkness ends.*
scarlett: Ah, Bluebear..that one I am saving. It is very
appropriate for my life right now
scarlett: *Small green seedling/bursts forth into bright
sunshine/ growing into life.*
Bluebear: *smile* . . I'm glad, scarlett . . I like
your's too
Lovewombat: *Gentle Breezes Hint/of distant thunderings/as
clouds scuttle by*
Bluebear: *Caterpillar shrugs/ as butterflies flutter by/ Metamorphosis*
Lani: Bluebear LOL .. love it *giggle*
Lovewombat: *Bob the cat settles/into the couch like a
sack/of ripe potatoes*
Bluebear: Lovewombat . . enjoying your's very much too
scarlett: my form seems to need work..it's only 4 syllables
in first verse..but I am enjoying the creativity..
Lani: scarlett, it takes time .. its not an easy form for
most of us .. but then there are those like Lovewombat and
Bluebear ..wordcrafters extordinaire
Lovewombat: I am enjoying your's too Bluebear...:) you got a
good flair. :)
curioustoo: *on the verge of light / must meet maker of
slumber / as eyes weigh down thoughts *
Lani: sweet dreams curioustoo (( hugs )) glad you came
in to play with us *S*
scarlett: *sleepy web surfers/giggle with some new
friends/soon we all need sleep *
Lovewombat: *Dancing bobbing notes/seemingly innocent stare/as
energies flow*
Bluebear: *Skin caresses skin/ Blood rushes in warming
blush / the joy of night sounds.*
Lovewombat: *Crafty synergies/sparkle during halftime
of/eternities game*
Lani: *S* .... *S* .. . *S* ... *S* ....Lovewombat .. ooooooooo love it!!!!
Lovewombat: *orgasmic kisses/dance delicately across/her bare
blushing breasts*
Lovewombat: [grins]
Lani: Lovewombat *S*
scarlett: I keep dropping syllables. I did go read his poem to you, Lani
it is beautiful. I think it would melt me too. *VBS*
Lovewombat: *Scarlett's words begin/to dance to the rhythmic
rush/of the incoming tide *
scarlett:
*smouldering scarlett...sensual spirits
strive...seeking sure soulmates*
(editor's suggestion:
*Scarlett's
smouldering/ spirit strives sensually/ seeking sure soulmates*
)
Bluebear: wonderful, scarlett, an alliterative haiku!
Lani: scarlett by george I think she's got it *giggle* ..
*VBS*
Lovewombat: We are a dangerous thing - this magical haiku
spiritweb gang of three . .
LSeeker:Howdy, was wonderin' if I could join you all over
here?
scarlett: Lseeker..all are welcome..join us in relearning
haiku
Lani: LSeeker of course .. we're playing with haiku *S*
Lovewombat: *Come in the water/is fine and the Dolphins
song/echoes loudly still*
LSeeker: Thanks all, I didn't mean to disturb. I'm not even
sure I know what haiku is.. But I'll enjoy just listening
for awhile. *S*
Lovewombat: Lani: I think a hoot would be to use
colloquialisms in a haiku..you know "hankerin'" or
"fairPiece"...that would be a challenge.
Bluebear: *Child Time crawls and crawls/ speed picks up
and strolls along/ speeding through old age.*
Lani: Bluebear oh .. yup *S* ..ok .. I can't resist ..
*grow old along with / me the best is yet to be / journey in
joy, si!*
scarlett: many are here..are we nuts? I'm having too much fun
to go to bed..5 syllables..7 syllables..5 again try it
Lani: LSeeker the pattern is 5/7/5 syllables .. just listen
for a bit and then try it .. we'll help . . its fun and once
you get your mind wrapped around the form it starts to flow
*S*
scarlett: *new haiku learning/laughter sounds on
spiritweb/remembering truth*
Bluebear: LSeeker, haiku is an Oriental poetic form . .
. one variation of which is a three-line poem of 17 total
syllables in the form of 5-7-5 . . the poem should have an
overall thought, but each line may also be complete as well.
Lovewombat: *Slimey snails slither/slowly sensuously as
/seagulls sing above*
Lani: LSeeker, as Bluebear says .. the 'higher form' (harder)
is when the thought runs thru the entire haiku .. as most of
Lovewombats and Bluebear's do *S* but its perfectly ok for
it to be like this one:
*night rainbow shimmers / the wind
falls silent in awe / magic walks the night *..
(5/7/5 but
each a complete thought)
Bluebear: *Lovewombat pens well/ scarlett learns to play
with words/ so haiku evolves*
Lovewombat: *Satiated Sealions/lounge lazily longing
for/freshly flown in fish*
Lani: Lovewombat ROFL!
Lovewombat: [bows] . . That was a tough one...alliteration in each line
Lani: Lovewombat brilliant! LOL! I'm still laughing
scarlett: *summer comes slowly/spreading her fresh green
mantle/ alight with fireflies*
Lani: scarlett *VBS* *applause*
Lovewombat: I liked that one Scarlett..:)
Lani: *I wasn't looking / for a husband I was just /
surviving Winter*
Lovewombat: *Shamen learns magic's/call as seasons cycle
thrall/heeding nature's rules*
Lani: ROFL!! this is wonderful .. THANK YOU !! *S*
LSeeker: *Enjoy Listening/Evolving to Miracles/Entrapped
Magic*
LSeeker: Ok *S* So I'm not so good
Lani: LSeeker *VBS* *applause*
Lani: *wolves haunting howling / cuts through the night as
she calls / to guide home her mate*
Lovewombat: Ooooo...wolfie haiku
scarlett: *what I thought was/ happening to me now/ turned
into joy*
Lani: LSeeker you should have seen my first attempts LOL!
Lovewombat has done them before .. Bluebear has too .. I've
'tried' .. having more luck now
LSeeker: *A breeze to please me/ In sunset hour's rhyming
time/Leaves all spun and done*
LSeeker:Was that a bit better?
scarlett: Lseeker..I have improved greatly in these few
short hours. We have some good teachers here.
Lani: scarlett *VBS*
Lovewombat: Your getting the hang of it Lseeker..yes you are
Lani: LSeeker *VBS* *applause*
Lani: (( Lovewombat )) THANK YOU *bows* this was
WONDERFUL ..a joyous experience here at swc has become far
too rare and this was one of the BEST *VBS*
Lovewombat: [bows snout] you honour me beyond any reckoning
Lani..my poor poet words do not do it justice so..[bows
snout again] But I am glad that you have enjoyed it.
Lani: *MerlinsMuse has come / to join our joyous haiku /
gathering tonight*
LEGS: Wombat, you are really good at this, as Lani
said.. and I would be happy to see a set.. submitted..
o.k.?
LSeeker: * Wish washing of dream/Touching deeply while
sleeping/Soothing Sensation*
LSeeker: Lani Your not the only one! *lol* . . Not exactly the poetry writing I"m good at. *lol*
Lani: *damn I think I am / infected by the haiku / bug now
too oh joy*
LSeeker: lovewombat Thanks for sharing! *S* {{HUG}}
Lani: *it is funny once / you wrap your mind around its /form
it seems to flow*
Lovewombat: *bows snout to Lseekr* My pleasure.haiku is fun..
LSeeker: * My mind in shambles/Chaotically Cursed/But spirit
flies high*
Lani: *frozen-moon has come / to join our joyous haiku /
gathering tonight*
(greeting in haiku style a passing thru chatter)
LSeeker: Ok did I goof? Is Chaoticaly 4 or 3?..AND it was meant
to be "/And Chaotically Cursed/"
Lani: chaotically cha ot ic all y . . . 5 ..? . . . hmm or cha ot ic ly .. 4
LSeeker: *Walking down my path/heavenly earth has no
wrath/Only singing laugh *
LSeeker: *Mind is Exploding/In Rhyming of this haiku/Too
washing away*
Lani: LSeeker *S*
Lovewombat: Whew..this is taking a lot of energy..hehe..
Lani: Lovewombat yes it does *S* .. and it is wonderful and
fun *S* you've been at it for over an hour and a half, dear *S*
Lovewombat: Lani: has it been THAT long?
Lani: Lovewombat I've been online for one hour and forty one
minutes and I came in here within the first 5 minutes online
and you started very quickly after that
Lovewombat: I've not done haiku's in ages..but it's like
learning to ride a bike I guess..you never forget..I used to
write em all the time..
Lani: I sort of suspect this haiku thing will happen again
though *S*
Lani: oh .. I'm fading fast here .. more tired than I
realized .. but we've been doing haiku for over 2 hours!!!
YIKES .. time flies etc (( LSeeker )) I think
I'm going to toddle off to bed
Lovewombat: *I think though it is/time for lovewombat to
sleep/perchance to dream of*
scarlett: * I sleep to dream of/magic moons and fairy
rings/glowing in the night*
scarlett: love, goodnight..it has been wonderful. It's my
first time in a chat room, so its news to me that it isnt
always so positive. I said the moon was strong
tonight...sweet dreams
Lovewombat: [bows snout to Scarlett] thank you for
sharing...[trots over and gives her a cookie] I will scamper
down into my den now...[scampers] :) good night all...:)
scarlett: Love thank you for the cookie. Lani I have enjoyed
it greatly. Thank you everyone! :)
Lani: scarlett, lovewombat..sweet dreams *S*
LSeeker:Lani And I missed most the fun!Oh well, maybe
next time. Thanks for letting me share..
Lani: LSeeker it might be worth reviewing tomorrow .. some
really good ones from Lovewombat and from Bluebear
(( hugs ))
LEGS: *s*...In summary, I think the real pleasure of haiku is the accomplishment of conveying thought concisely within the form, evoking a picture with the phrase. Beautiful words are a plus. See more of Bluebear's haiku's in "More Haiku" this month. Perhaps you, too, would like to haiku with a friend or for your personal pleasure.
